I wrote a James Bond/Peter Gunn genre song about Charles Koch. Can I get feedback?

[Beakybird]

It's about a fictional global warming villain, but it was inspired by the Koch brothers.

I'd love to get artistic feedback!!

Listen to Tears of Acid Rain by Larry Levin 1 on #SoundCloud
https://on.soundcloud.com/JMY3u

There’s a man who’s burning the earth
For a plot that he’s plotting
He thinks the fast rising seas
Will be fun for yachting
And when he looks at the trees
He feels greed for lumber
All he wants is the world
And it’s his for the plunder

And he cries tears of acid rain
And he bleeds crude oil from his veins
He’s the man who’s burning coal
Where there used to be a soul

There’s a man who’s burning the earth
And you’re his next victim
Loves a disease he believes
And you’re but a symptom
He’ll bleed you dry, and then fly away
As your heart is breaking
All he wants is the world
And it’s his for the taking

And he cries tears of acid rain
And he bleeds crude oil from his veins
He’s the man who’s burning coal
Where there used to be a soul

When all is smashed and destroyed
He’ll be in his rocket
His plan is being deployed
And not a man can stop it
Of course, someone will try
But there are a million ways to die

And he cries tears of acid rain
And he bleeds crude oil from his veins
He’s the man who’s burning coal
Where there used to be a soul

He’s the man who’s burning coal
Where there used to be a soul

[ProfessorGAC]

1. I Like It

I hear a bigger guitar sound for the chorus to add impact, as well as harmonies.
It's good as it is, but that's how I would put icing on the cake.

[Beakybird]

2. Thanks so much for listening. These are great suggestions 😊.

[ProfessorGAC]

3. No Problem

I'm big on 3 or 4 vocal parts on my stuff.
In case you haven't heard thus, here's a l8nk.
https://SoundCloud.com/user-134084288|

[Beakybird]

4. Finally got around to listening.

Your Sweet Jane is very sweet. Lou Reed and Ian Hunter would both give thumbs up.

[ProfessorGAC]

5. Thanks

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BTW: everything you hear is me. I'm playing and singing everything.
Doing everything is part of the fun.
I'm too lazy to write, so covers of songs I always dug is what I mess with.
I can write melodies, changes, rhythms & arrangements in short order.
Lyrics not so much. I've got 50 unfinished tunes because by the time I got arrangement ideas down and started recording, I quit liking the lyrics.
9 or 10 out of 60 ever made it to the finish line.
I just don't care enough anymore to have 85% of my effort be pointless.