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Poetry

LisaM

(28,885 posts)

1. I like this.

Reply to Croney (Original post)

Thu Sep 17, 2020, 09:13 PM

Sep 2020

I'd put "Squinting over at Cafe du Monde" in its own line though. And maybe think about taking the capital letters out of the lines that don't begin sentences (though that could be a style preference, and I'm not trying to change your style, if that's how you like it).

But I particularly like the title and how the time and place unfold. And, it's very visual.

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Midnight in Moscow (or... Things the grandkids don't know) [View all] Croney Aug 2020 OP

I like this. LisaM Sep 2020 #1

Those are good suggestions. You're so kind! Croney Sep 2020 #2

I wondered about that. LisaM Sep 2020 #3